Icarusting, Icarusted, Wait till you Hear the Icarest

Never-mind my suffering, toss it out
The door and let dust claim it whole. I think
I’m more than tears I’ve cried. I’ve faced the brink
And walked barefoot backwards. I’ve come about

A new way of living, carry a stout,
Hard heart still light enough to swim not sink
The deep end of sorrow. My eyes don’t blink
When flying through the sky. Full lungs, I shout

But then you come and call, your words a hook
That tightly hinge my heels and pull me down.
I try to fight, resist, but still I fall—

Full force— Find you can’t even deign a look.
Instead, you prance merrily around town.
I laugh. My eyes, too dry to cry or bawl.




Sonnet by Sameen The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2026-09-02 at 18:29

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Artorius
I love the story of Icarus, how he thought falling was worth it because he had soared. Nice poem.
2026-09-04


arquious The PoetBay support member heart!
Here before us is an “Icarian Fugue” that feels like a mind circling its own gravity, with its rising, falling, rising again, never quite escaping the orbit of inherited wounds. The fragmentation isn’t a flaw but it’s the form. A fugue is repetition with variation, and your poem uses that structure to show how ascent and descent become the same motion when the psyche is under pressure. The myth isn’t decoration but it’s the emotional shorthand for ambition, danger, and the ache of trying to transcend what shaped you. The shifts between girlfriend, sister, and commentary read like voices entering and exiting the fugue. The poem doesn’t resolve, and that’s its honesty. It’s an Icarus who survives, but survival itself becomes another loop.
2026-09-04


Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
I like the way you are encouraging yourself in the poem. Only to be brought down again like Icarus. The structure is interesting and the rhymes good. The first line wraps around and interrupted the flow a bit. Just my thought, don't curse me for it. Very good though.
2026-09-03