it's all about spin

a thing lacking in beauty
finds nothing of joy, ever;
it's uncomeliness increases
and will never be celebrated
an unsightly recollection

passed on each generation,
so make the most of opportune
moments to leave a mark
whether in ugliness or beauty
kindle always, that inner spark


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Poetry by arquious The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2015-11-30 at 13:03

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Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
I really like this one. It has a "do not go gently" quality to it. And the opening line "a thing lacking in beauty finds nothing of joy" is brilliant.
2015-12-04



A nice sentiment, but I found the execution a bit stifled. The fact that the first and the last two lines have a song like rhythm while everything in between has a prosaic one creates this jarring break in communiciation. Doesn't really fit with the poem. Just my honest opinion.
2015-12-03