Spleen

2006-08-21
The Lady sings the blues! When you got all what you want - who come you're not happy? That's an eternal question. I like (well...) the line "Isn't that what I want it to be?. It tells me that you had plans for your life but it can be too good.
A very simple but thoughtful text.

2006-08-13
Lots of questions and the only one that can answere is you.
The poem itself can be more stringent. I suggest that you try to write it in first person. "I" instead of "you". Don't tell me what I feel. Tell me what YOU fell. That's intresting.
It's just a suggestion. Do what you want with it.