marketa

 

~

 

this is something different

the deep swell of a tsunami long before

it rolls upon a distant shore

 

a welling up   a force of great potential 

as yet understated  

as when we danced this weekend  

 

no swaying of arms above your head  

no soul-searching look

but something   your movement to the music   to be sure

 

but something   something within   

take it or leave it   with a caveat   

don't even try   if you don't mean it  

 

~ 





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Written on 2016-11-08 at 02:35

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Ann Wood The PoetBay support member heart!
Nice poem Jim well done, I love it.
2018-03-13


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
Scary. The real thing can be like that. Good luck.
2016-11-10



Love the grace and power of this metaphor, and the subtle discernment of so much within body language alone. Intense and lovely and so well-crafted.
2016-11-08


Kathy Lockhart
This leaves me with a foreboding. I am left wondering what is happening and why. With every description, every detail, you lead to this end. There is power in this! Well done!
2016-11-08



The power in these words is almost frightening.
It feels like a powder keg about to explode and the last two lines will resonate in the readers minds for a ling time.
Strongly felt.
Ashe
2016-11-08



difficult to go deep in this poem,
i don't understand
but something your movement to the music to be sure

but something something within
take it or leave it with a caveat
don't even try if you don't mean it

i meant
the psychology behind
2016-11-08


Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
I like this a lot. It must be so calm before a tsunami. I hope the waves carry you where you want to go.
2016-11-08


Bibek The PoetBay support member heart!
Hmm ... good one. Enjoyed this.
2016-11-08