poem that also works as lyrics
The subject matter is 'depression' this sone explains how I feel when I get really depressed and useless


sink

Don't want to drown
but I don't want to breath
It pulls me down
but I let it
Loose myself to the buety of the sea
Run out of oxygen ...naturally
My lungs are full nut I'm breathless
the atmosphere hipnotic
My body gluides through clear water
But I don't feel alive
Let it wash over me
the salt goes deeper than the skin
And I feel like drowning
Delibratley forget to breath



Poetry by gills
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Written on 2006-10-22 at 14:22

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Alan J Ripley The PoetBay support member heart!
Being I suffer from lexdysia,
I thourely enjoyed reading.
Not dwelling on any spelling mistakes,
Just emerging myself in your,
Thoroughly enjoyable poem.
( Yes I do know how it's spelt).
Regards Alan
2024-04-22


gills
Thank you for pointing those words out - I am a terrible speller and although do check work for mistakes still make many!! Thanks for pointing out the many mistakes I made in this text
2006-12-18


NotaDeadPoet
I like the topic but I trip over the words that are so close that spelling does make a difference:
breath for breathe
buety for beauty
gluides for glides

ican tolerate hipnotic for hypnotic
and even delibratley for deliberately

But, that is the English teacher critic in me. My life has been devoted to eliciting correctness ad nauseam. The subject and the read are well worth the time spent even hurdling the minor bumps.
2006-12-17


la tristesse
god knows i've been there, so well expressed, gills.
2006-10-25