My second haiku...hope Im doing these right


Fireplace Grief

Letter burns in fire.
Tight fist and soft whimpering.
Dreams curl up in smoke.



Haiku by Dominic
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Written on 2006-11-17 at 07:50

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tony legba
Yes, you are doing it right.
There are some key features to classical hiaku--the third line creates a shift in perspective...yours does, from letter to mental thoughts...and there is ofetn one word that locates the season of writing. Nicely done.
2006-11-17