When love is annoyed, people think tis confined within this world's walls but i think, if its true maybe not in this world but in the next it will be ours.... ..because true love strengthens the tie with God and HE sees who deserves what, nomatter late!!


A cooked Love

If procurement of love was all the game for,
I would have lost it deeming a jerk of fate
But the rising smoke of cooked love
Senses maturity for empathy of uncanny retorts.
Folk's fake phenomenon fails
Encounter when my atypical tale
The ridges beyond the worlds of seduction---
I've held!
Where grows the beatitudes from the seeds of stoic
And mingles the love segregated back---devoid
by the baloney ego tic fire.
Will emerge this lust less love of mine,
Clearing the scum of his muddled up mind
Lucidly I see such scene ahead!
Just the jagged journey to pass,
Awaiting us would be the glorious bed.
My love is not confined within the mysteries of this world
It has its eternal destiny calling with unheard sound.




Poetry by Amna Ehsan
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Written on 2008-12-29 at 11:49

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Brilliant write, Tamra. Took my breath away!xx
2011-07-15


Amna Ehsan
Thanks dear Tai, your comment is much appreciated. but i guess you've misread the word "baloney" as "balcony" if you reread you'll find that. Secondly the word scum here suggests a crust that is worth avertable whereas smear if be used with clearing, wont make sense because both have simillar meanings. Thirdly dear pal, its not "deemed a jerk of fate" but "deeming a jerk of fate"
Anyhow, i really liked the way you've taken this text as because such critical reads make the writter learn. so thanks agian for the kind concern.
Cares,
2009-01-14



I really enjoyed this Tamra, it has one or two typos in it, 'balcony' for one and would suggest 'scum' doesn't really fit the classic language used. I would suggest 'smear' or something like that as an alternative and in the 2nd line would 'deemed' a jerk of fate, flow better? maybe a comma after the 'it but then there is no real punctuation in this style of writing, so maybe not.

I adore your line 'Where grows the beatitudes from the seeds of stoic' it is sumptuous in it's meaning and sound on the tongue when read out loud. I do hope you are right about God seeing!

Smiling at you

Tai
2009-01-13



Your love is so sweet but unheard my dear Amna
Thank's for sharing this beautiful poem...Happy New Year!

Love
Haseen
2009-01-10



Gr8 poem of strength and wisdom.
If we love those who love us, anyone can do that,
try loving those that despise you, hate you, annoy you, now that's tough love.
2008-12-29



Happy 2009 to you Tamra, and may it be filled with such love that you speak of so eloquently here. Love does bake a gloriously juicy cake for sure and I do believe with all my heart that love transcends life itself with hardly a ripple in the ethereal air....

Smiling at you

Tai
2008-12-29


Dee Daffodil
This poem makes one ponder. Why should love be earthly bound ? Nice poem !
Hugs,
Dee
2008-12-29