A lovers dilemma on thinking about his...love... which is true and selfless....


Thoughts about you and me..

I thought you were held in my dreams,
as i dream about you only....

I thought you were held in my breaths,
as i breath with conscious some times...

I thought you were held in my thoughts,
as people started to call me the day dreamer...

I thought you were held in my heart,
as i feel the sweet pain and weight within...

I thought you were held in my eyes,
as i see you every where and in every thing...

But look what a fool I'm for I was held in you... but not you in me.......



Poetry by Ratna Dinakar
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Written on 2007-04-17 at 22:32

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V.V.Ramesh
very well written:)
2007-06-01


Zoya Zaidi
A very philosophic poem, like the sages. 'I was within you and you within me as they say'.
(((Hugs dear Rantna for the nice poem)))
One small suggestion: the second stanza

"I thought you were held in my breaths,
as i breath with conscious some times..."

is not very well understood, what exactly do you mean to say by 'I breathe with conscious some times'?

Love, Zoya
2007-04-19