written in a corner of city lights bookstore

after consuming keats and his brethren

the afternoon light coming slant throught window

and you, in shadows, somewhere distant




a romance

 

~

 

when first you looked across the room

i looked down, because i'm shy

i wished, i did, was loath to presume

 

your cheeks were as the rose’s bloom

your smile, i couldn’t help but sigh

when first you looked across the room

 

heady, was the aroma of your perfume

the scent, no desire had i to deny

i wished, i did, was loath to presume

 

lips and breath, i longed to consume

i dared looked up, and met your eye

when first you looked across the room

 

our hearts entwined, threads upon a loom

a fabric made of love’s sweet ply

i wished, i did, was loath to presume

 

our love, it did bind, bride and groom

though bride and bride, can we assume

i wished, i did, was loath to presume

when first you looked across the room

 

~

 

 

 





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Written on 2015-11-12 at 16:41

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Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
Well that shows how dumb I am. It is villanesque. Live and learn.
2015-11-17


Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
This is one of your best. The 4th stanza is so clever and beautiful. In fact it is all beautiful and the "room, presume" variations give it a classical feel. And it all lives within a wonderful but single moment :)
2015-11-17


Dorsey Baker The PoetBay support member heart!
I love this poem! I love the flow! Dorsey
2015-11-15


Nancy Sikora
A villanelle! Very challenging. And this one is sweet and full of pheromones.
2015-11-13


countryfog
A difficult form but it doesn't intrude on the poem. Channeling the Romantics isn't easy either but this is very nicely done. I haven't pulled out my Keats in years, time to dust it off.
2015-11-12



This beautiful poem has the sound of the formal romantic poets mentioned as they have influenced the writer.
A great job in writing this one.
Ashe
2015-11-12


Lawrence Beck The PoetBay support member heart!
This is a fine poem on its own, though I do hear echoes of romantic poets, like Keats.
2015-11-12