L

You made us leave Paradise.

Your first born sons you kicked out straight-
For what? Because our vocal rage
Ruffled your feathers, and made seem
You were not perfect. Your beauty
Is a lie. While you celebrate
Your humans, us who venerate
Your every word (Your every step
We learned and strove to collect
In our thoughts) you cast out, why?
For you cherish humility.

I'm sorry you made me perfect
But I will not feel bad for it.
I'm sorry you're an old fool who
Wants to relive his glory days.

For isn't that what all creation is:
The big bang, over and over again?
While you stand stupefied at what you've done.




Poetry by Sameen
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Written on 2019-07-01 at 21:41

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one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
I still prefer reading these not allegorically, but more literally, as a family, rather than otherwise. The dynamics are the same, but without the Creation aspect is becomes more personal. Either way, I like the changing perspectives.
2019-07-02


one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
J, K, L—these merit more readings. The changing points of view and age(?) is a little complicated, but it will sort itself out. You've done a good job of creating a sense of realism about this couple, this family. I'm not sure I have it right, this is how it seems.

Good and interesting writing, Sameen.
2019-07-01