I have written a song and i want your opinion about it.Thank you.


TILL



My mind walks
among the valley of thoughts.
Picks some like flowers
and holds them for hours.

But...

Till the sun dies
and the sea dries,
my mind will think of you.
Till the moon dives
and the night lights,
my heart will be with you.


My mind tries,
to translate the birdsong fights.
Hopes to find new words,
to describe natures worlds.

But...

Till the sun dies
and the sea dries,
my mind will think of you.
Till the moon dives
and the night lights,
my heart will be with you.


My mind wants,
to fly away longs.
In solitude creates
a universe of open gates.

But...


Till the sun dies
and the sea dries,
till the moon dives
and the night lights,
I will be in love with you.




Poetry by AFRODITE STATHI
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Written on 2020-06-17 at 12:14

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bibek adhikari The PoetBay support member heart!
It's beautiful, just a perfect country song. :)
2020-06-22


one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
i like it. i imagined Adele singing it, then Louis Armstrong, then me.
2020-06-17


ken d williams The PoetBay support member heart!
The sun sets
Come the morning
The sun will rise
A new day will begin

The spring tide
Will take the sea
Yet the spring tide
Will return the sea
Ken D
2020-06-17