That Drunken Moment


There was a quiet moment once,
when we had drunk too much
and all the others were asleep,
the music was playing
and you took your violin
and just plucked at the strings
and in that drunken moment
I loved you more than every note
we ever played again.

The world was sleeping and we
two souls alone, lying on cushions
kissing, in the only way
a flautist and violinist know how to do,
buried underneath a sheepskin coat,
over filled ashtrays and empty
cheap bottles of plonk
like the plinkity tunes in
underground nightclubs we sometimes
played, for cheap drinks and saucisson
slapped between bread with cheese

I loved you but it couldn't translate
and later when we woke and you
looked at me with such devotion
I pursed my flautist lips
and took a spray of Chanel
and until a kiss in a thunderstorm
it stayed that way and way and way
as listless nights lead and lend
I meet you by the ferry
and you ask what if it had been different



Poetry by Elle The PoetBay support member heart!
Read 325 times
Written on 2021-06-19 at 19:05

dott Save as a bookmark (requires login)
dott Write a comment (requires login)
dott Send as email (requires login)
dott Print text


one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
Sublime. So romantic ~ the what if's . . .
2021-06-21


Michael R. Burch
This is very nice writing that captures not only what happened but also the mood, the emotion and sense of loss. However, without punctuation or a stanza break, the last two lines seemed a bit awkward to me. Perhaps consider something like:

as listless nights lead and lend ...
Now I meet you by the ferry
and you ask what if things had been different
2021-06-20



Such skills of exposition, cadence, and image. About to be bookmarked. Thank you for posting this poem.
2021-06-19