Ok, I'll figure the system out eventually! Now I've put this in the right place. I like to look at the challenges. 14 lines of a memory I'd gladly relive.


First Kiss

August night
Big bar fight

Across the street
Abandoned building

Grabs my hand
fast we ran

Climbed up the side
sat on the roof

Feet dangling
laughing hysterically

Holding hands
soft and sweet

The first kiss
is always the best




Poetry by LacyxDevine
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Written on 2022-01-31 at 15:15

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Hans Bump
I like how each scene was framed individually and then presented in progression until you reached the closing line. Enjoyed the format and the tone. Thanks for the poem.
2022-02-03


one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
Oh, I do love this—cinematic and so very real.

Makes my first kiss seem very tame (but no less sweet).
2022-02-01