Another (correct) Tanka poem.


Stranger among friends

Stranger among friends,
They seeing only what he chose;
Keeping his secret well,
When it then became the wall
Nobody could ever scale


D G Moody 2023




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Written on 2023-11-18 at 12:15

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Alan J Ripley The PoetBay support member heart!
Another fine piece of poetry,
Strangely enough it reminds me
Of the wall. Regards Alan
2023-11-19


D G Moody The PoetBay support member heart!
No, though I have added some punctuation to make it more clear, and also in that 'Their' is maybe better as 'They'. Thanks Sameen.
2023-11-18


Sameen
That their there doesn't seem grammatically correct, right? Or am I tripping?
2023-11-18