I wrote it as a rock song, but with some minor adjustments i came up with this....
hope you like it....


Young superman...

when i was young
i closed my eyes
and i was superman

flew over buildings
hunted villains
and destroyed their plan

night after night
i'd win my fights
but noone knew who i was

no credit,
no trophy
not even applause

so i dressed up,
like a man,
and became one of you

now we go
to fancy resturantes
and don't have a clue

about the crime
that's carryed out
in every land

from america
and mexico
china and japan

open your eyes.....




Poetry by pettyodd
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Written on 2006-10-08 at 10:13

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sania
would have made a beautiful rock song too.
all the best and love.
2006-10-21


sania
a thought provoking poem. kudos to u 4 this one.
yea, as we grow older we tend 2 become accustomed 2 the ways of the world and start concentrating at our own selfish goals.
2006-10-21


Zachary P. B.
definitely great theme and imagery... one thing no one wants to be is ignorant...

great.
z
2006-10-13


kladdpapper
Yes, the older we get the more we close our eyes to the world. we forget to wonder, question, observe, fascinate over the extroardinary and see the unfair. I don't want to grow up. Not in this world.

great poem, I love it!
smart with the superman theme and everything. really good. : )
2006-10-08


Zoya Zaidi
A very thought-provoking, hard-hitting write!
Welcome back to the bay!
Zoya
2006-10-08


keith nunes
a great inspiration to all - write on!
2006-10-08



An interesting theme here Young superman. It is a shame that we are only able to see the wrongs of the world so clearly when we are young. You are right, we should open our eyes as adults, but life takes so much of our time, in the surviving, that we turn our eye to the blind side. Two typos, 'carried' and a separation of 'no one'. Thanks for sharing, Tai
2006-10-08