© Erik Brickman 2005


Skies of us


In a flash you were in my sights

Flying high across the nightsky

Like no other, on wings of Gold

A fiery flight, against stars

Nothing more beautiful in life

So proud, so vivid, so only YOU.



Then I shot you down, down, down

With leaden words, dark, hard

Spiralling, you hit the causes

And with impact you understood

My words, your leaping life

Why your wings had to fall.



Now I roam endlessly alone

Through these remembering skies

Ever dreaming, ever searching

Of the moment you will lift

Again in flaming splendour

Towards the starry skies of us.



Poetry by Erik Brickman
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Written on 2005-10-13 at 18:32

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Ray
Loved the flow and verses very much. Keep up the skills. You keep emphasizing where and when needed. Remember it is your poem and only you know what you want to realize in your texts! Thanks!
2005-10-14



Flaming splendor is all over this text, Erik.
2005-10-13


Zoya Zaidi
BEAUTIFUL IMAGERY!! The symbol of a bird in flight is so imaginatively used: the soaring the, hunting down,spiralling!!! It's just...lovely!!! I have a poem:' A Bird's Saga'- with a similar kind of sybolisom, must hunt it out to share here. Well done!!!
2005-10-13


penfold18
this piece blends together well from start to finish great stuff well done.
2005-10-13


chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
ok, that is upto you. why didn't you just reply in im though? but i think it spoils the poem.
2005-10-13


Erik Brickman
I think not. Even if it on the web means shouting, here it stands for emphasizing. So, I'll keep it. But thanks for your comment!
2005-10-13


chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
perhaps have the YOU as normal lettering? i think it would look better.

aye we can be cruel with our words when we want to be, i think sometimes we push hard at the ones we love just to test the boundaries.
2005-10-13