The words of prisoning

The child takes it serious
all the mocking words.

It is not!
The child does not know
because he do not know better.

He got a life in lonelyness.



Poetry by Poe_t
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Written on 2005-10-30 at 20:54

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Poe_t
You don't mess with my spelling Esti.
I must say that no languages sound as good as english in the many ways it is spoken although japanese and chinese is beautyful.
that is my opinion.
2005-11-06


Esti D-G The PoetBay support member heart!
Hi poe_t,
Just read "prisoning " which is short and sweet!
Try "takes it seriously"
"because he doesn't know any better" or "does not" and " he's got a life in loneliness." which is a beautiful line and very sad. By the way , I think "got" is an ugly sounding word and I usually use "has" instead.
Hope you don't mind me messing with your spelling! Keep writing your great poems,
luv esti
2005-11-05