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Lain: Chapter 2.2

It was twenty two minutes shy of midnight, and it was evident of my lack of sleep by mapping the dark rings around my eyes. I had closed the laptop screen down, whilst the printer inches beside it was still printing off an important document I strung together. About an hour before I had found twenty seven strangers by the name of Alan within a five mile radius of where the incident occurred. I filtered the documents by age and marital status, leaving me with fourteen men that had either separated or married, between the ages of 18-29. Neither of them had a picture or descriptions on their facial features, nor where they lived or who their next-to-kin were. This didn’t bother me seriously; I had the second names which had gotten me millimetres closer of finding what had happened that night and who Alan was.

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The willow tree splashed a shadow that curled around me, strangling me. I couldn’t breathe, I couldn’t see clearly and didn’t know where I was or how I got in the arms of the willow tree. I felt its warmth intervene with the hairs standing at the back of my neck.  The dark horizon of the pond that rippled in front of the willow tree lay quiet, letting the commotion of life and death commence without question. My ears perked up like a wolves, whilst scraping the essence of trampled dead leaves behind me. I could hear the confrontation of something more evil or more tainted than me. I tried to turn my body to find who was tailing my moans.
“Kano…” the voice behind me whispered.
I tried to speak, but for some reason I couldn’t reply. I knew it wasn’t the shadow that caged me. Suddenly a pain hit my knee, the knee that had hit the car bonnet. With the sudden pain increasing I woke up sweating. I brushed my hair back in mere amazement, and opened the window letting the failing breeze creep into my room in hope that it would restore my sanity. It didn’t. I had always remained sane, the dream had just felt so realistic that I didn’t notice the friction between.





Short story by John Ashleigh
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Written on 2005-11-29 at 18:18

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