I kinda ignored the iambic tetrameter 'cause I couldn't make it work... :(


The Shake-Triolet Challenge

With such swift speed, you gave me the shake,
Losing me back at the start. Of the start
I could never have grasped what you take
With such swift speed. You gave me the shake
Down your spine, ideas I can't seem to wake
On what you might mean deep down in your heart.
With such swift speed, you gave me the shake,
Losing me back at the start of the start.




Poetry by Ducks
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Written on 2009-02-06 at 01:05

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Anne Westlund
I really like this, especially since it is not an obvious poem. Not in the right meter either, another reason to like it.

Anne
2009-02-06


Sun.Moon.Stars.Rain
i like the way these lines fit together. quite an enigmatic piece, well done!
2009-02-06