I decided to emmulate someone else for today's oneword


I released the clutch as the car came to a halt and I let it slide out of gear

Sweat was trickling down my face and I just didn't know what to do

I breathed a deep breath and began to cry

It was too much... too soon... I couldn't take it...

Then suddenly, without even thinking, I started the car up again and just drove...

I got on the highway and drove and drove until I was fairly certain I was too far away for anyone to find me

Then I just broke down... I got out of my car... and ran... I just ran until I fell over

When I woke up, I calmly walked back to my car. I drove back into town, knowing nothing would ever be the same again.

Poetry by Ducks
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Written on 2009-05-19 at 02:34

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Morgan Cellohead
Brilliant. It's so easy to see it all happen - it's so understandable, even though it doesn't describe some everyday series of events. Definitely one of my favorites of yours.

I agree with both previous comments, and add that I like where you decided to use ellipses and where you did not.

excellent job

Kathy Lockhart The PoetBay support member heart!
your style kept me curious throughout waiting for the next line to reveal a little more of this event. The ending was mysterious which adds to the intrigue.

Compelling and well-composed...I especially approve of your decision not to end your sentences until the very last one. Awesome write!