Fair Hair


There are words she wears in her hair
Brushes of Light, combing the Nights
Sway away,
In her existential ways she says
' Always tomorrow, never now
We shall go and be there somehow'
She fades from my sight to repair
The walls of Heavenly gems
Her eyes shining diadems,
Her hands righting worlds brave and fair
There are words she wears in her hair.



Poetry by Charles Lezine
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Written on 2012-05-10 at 17:37

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Melie Bacon
Thumbs up!
Well-crafted! However, my only gripe is one shared with many other seasoned and talented poets the world over, namely the use of uppercase characters at the beginning of each line, left margin flush, in lieu of a lowercase character when continuing a sentence...it's an outmoded practice of a bygone epoch; in addition to unnecessary, distracting, unimaginative and dilettantish. It's an all-too-common mistake (sadly enough) prevalent among novice contemporary poets. Please accept my critique in the spirit it is intended, as constructive criticism--which I offer to those who demonstrate potential, as you clearly do. Pay it forward, spread the word.

Mel
2012-05-25