Er.... brand new (weird) poem. Feel free to rip it apart in any comments! LOL. Subject to rewrite.....


Cryoface

security sighs
and shakes its head
overwrought

smiles frantic
plastic grimace

dying by degrees




Poetry by StillHoppin The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2013-03-18 at 00:57

Tags Weird  Anxiety  Freeze 

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*Wow*

What's to rewrite?? I can feel this one. Seriously, wow.
2013-04-16


Rik The PoetBay support member heart!
As this was given a tag of anxiety then I say it sums up that particular beast extremely well. Especially considering the brevity of the poem. So no ripping apart from me. :-)
2013-03-27


Ferenc Inigo Beck
Covers a lot of ground,(in a short space) Nice going.(Cute kid!)
2013-03-22


F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
What do you feel is wrong with this? I like how it forces my mind to make the associations between the suggestions of something not going quite how it should be and how it'd be wished it were. That's my imagination for you :) I like the space this gives me to take what I want from it. Something I like very much from others' works :) I take this as a self-confidence making a circus of things... something I often relate to.
2013-03-20


Nathalia
I like it. Don't change it!
2013-03-18