Thank you for the inspiration jim




The trickster's kiss (Triolet challenge)*revised*



Why is it so?
That we kill each other with a kiss
When we actually feel that we "lose" ourselves
Why is it so?
That we never say teach me with a kiss how to
Blissfully forget the sigh between our kisses
Why is it so?
That we kill each other with a kiss. . . 

"The minute I heard my first love story,
I started looking for you, not knowing
how blind that was.

Lovers don't finally meet somewhere,
they're in each other all along."

From Essential Rumi
by Coleman Barks





Original draft

1Why is it so?
2That we kill each other with a kiss

4why is it so?


7Why is it so?
8That we kill each other with a kiss . . .





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Written on 2014-02-09 at 15:25

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F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
Very nice... I especially liked lines 5 & 6 :)
2014-02-09



It makes one wonder what the Trickster's motive is. Is it clever to steal a kiss? Perhaps it's a mutual desire to "lose" ourselves, in which we are both tricksters.
2014-02-09



Nicely done. I like the internal rhyme of 'blissfully' for kiss.
2014-02-09