christina

2007-03-05
While I like the concept of the poem and the message behind it, I find the flow to be a little distracting.
I'm not entirely sure what you meant by "losten" I tried looking up a definition for it but there wasn't one. Otherwise a good piece.

2007-02-27
Interesting word usage, I'm not sure if it was intentional or not but your rhyming scheme was off, otherwise it is a powerful poem. well expressed.