Lisa Zaran

2006-01-29
Zoya,

How can I respond? Your words to me were so generous. You only missed me because I don't post here often enough.

I am glad you did though. Your poetry is astounding. Fresh and alive. Exuberant!

Adding you as a writing friend so I do not miss a single poem.

2006-01-29
Hi Bob.

You had me interested by the title. Intrigued by the first line.
Enthralled by the entire poem.

Wonderful work!

I am adding you as a writing friend if you don't mind.

2005-08-05
"at the end of
each hand

i am lost."

Every line from the title to the closing three words is so moving. Like stirring water. I have read all of your poems and have enjoyed every single one, but, this is my favorite I think.

~lisa

2005-08-05
Absolutely exquisite.

2005-07-29
"shaking hands
Without ever making sounds"

Is my favorite part. I like the near miss rhyme scheme of it.

"Because these days, men and ladies, there's nothing gracious about the goodness"

This is very cool too because it shows an unusual way of thinking, placing the men before the ladies. I mean, as a thought process. It is what makes a poet unique I think from everybody else. They can see and hear and feel things differently.

~lisa

2005-07-29
I can't pinpoint even why this poem strikes me so.

It is very fragmented. I am especially drawn to: gates bent

Reminds me a bit of Roethke. His journal entries.

~lisa

2005-07-26
hey Lou.

There are lines in here that literally jar the reader. Like: dancing on a lake of melted beer bottles. And: Show me you living pulsating chambers so that we can compare.

There are other aspects I couldn't understand but so what? I tend to write emotionally and a lot of readers don't get my own poetry.

You've certainly got a knack for it though.

lisa

2005-07-25
I really adored this. Living certainly is an art isn't it? I also loved the poem about the street vendor taking a nap on the oranges. In three tiny lines I could visualize the entire scene. I could even see the sleeping vendor, smell the oranges, feel the sun. :)

lisa

2005-07-22
This is such a wonderful poem. Its strength is in the three short stanzas with their three short lines. So much has been said. Each word seems to have been perfectly chosen.

lisa

2005-07-22
Thank you for your comment. I'm glad the title made you smile. :)

Sometimes I prefer short poems over long and I like this one too. I also quite enjoyed All Ears too.

~lisa

2005-07-17
Reading this I can actually feel the plea-ing sensation. It is so good. The short clipped lines really make it impactful.

~lisa

2005-06-22
Hi Kerra.

This is a wonderful poem, my favorite out of the three you posted.

It has a nice cadence to it. I can see it becoming a song.

lisa

2005-06-16
Okay, I'm not going to actually comment under every single poem. Instead, I will end it right here by saying, I am stunned you are only 17. You have a fantastic gift, an original voice, a unique way of expressing yourself. Go get a book published. I've absolutely enjoyed every piece.

lisa

2005-06-16
Witty and original.

2005-06-16
Okay, now I have to go read everything else you wrote! This is fantastic. Your wordplay is superb. The attitude comes across so clearly in this piece. I'm sure I'll be commenting on some of your other pieces.

~lisa

2005-06-02
Mia,

Your poems literally rip into me. They say so much in just a few short lines.

lisa

2005-06-02
Hi.

I appreciate your honesty and opinion on my poem. Thank you for pointing out the line that you felt had strength.

I am commenting under this particular poem because it is the one I felt the most from. It is a wonderful poem. And romance is one of my favorite topics.

lisa

2005-06-01
Not only is this an original piece of writing in it's subject matter and word choices, the shape like a star is fantastic.

lisa

2005-05-31
Thank you for your wonderful comment. I especially feel good about it after reading your poems.

They read as well thought out lines from someone who has studied poetry or perhaps like someone in my own case, who lives it. :)

2005-05-31
Your writing has a wonderful cadence to it. It is very swinging, like a song would be. I enjoyed reading this quite a bit.

2005-05-30
I was immediately drawn in by the very first line: Nobody knows, that deep in my heart I keep me secret.

I tend to be an emotional writer as well and so favor other emotional poetry.

2005-05-30
Beautiful and moving poem. "Denying me a choice" is a wonderful and expressive line.