Sameen
Nice one! There's a playful and almost theatrical energy here that I appreciate. The wordplay or pun, I guess, that starts the poem is masterful. The storm as antagonist also gives the poem a wry charm that I appreciate. The little details of broken nib, cracked lead and stained carpet also ground the poem in the mundane frustration of lost work. Trust me, I know haha.

What I love the most about this poem is its tone. I believe that is its greatest strength which is why when it wobbles between narrative and commentary it loses me.

I mean, lines like "Rattled analogue/Pens and pencils" are vivid as fuck while "Sighed loud/Raised arms" feel rather like stage directions than poetry. Somethin to consider maybe?

The closing though. "Nuff said!" is amazing, confident and wry. It fits the voice and the poem. Your words have personality, this we knew. You are one of one.
2026-09-01

William Hughes
An altogether bad day! I've certainly had my share of those. I like the slender, curvaceous form of your poem.
2026-08-28

Jamsbo Rockda
I like the staccato style. It gives a feeling of foreboding. Sometimes bed and then a fresh start is best.
2026-08-28