co-written with "kid" aka Hakeen. Wanted to post on my page too, so many will not miss this young man's talent. He wrote 1, 2, 4, 5 stanzas.
i wrote 3 and 6 stanzas

The Forbidden Fruit (co-write with Kid)

Weeks upon weeks the plant was watered
Eye watching it with love and care
It was growth and development it returned
Believing that one day a fruit shall it bear

This fruit not being the red apple
Was as long as Isabella’s arm
It has a happy light green colour, which is a castle’s pinnacle
So attractive it looked that it meant no harm

But it was a dangerous tree, the most dangerous by far
Roots unyielding throughout the ages of storms that rage
But it held its self with wicked greed sending its poison out
Through bark, soil, leaves, fruit and seed

Never had we seen this type of fruit
But it likes is what we see and eat
It likes are inferior to its beauty, but we feel it shouldn’t touch a tooth
So attractive it looked that it made us sit

When we stood we saw nothing
Only a poisonous fleshy sealed pouch
Knowing this, most didn’t believe it was a pin
So attractive it was that they ate and cried “ouch!”

Oh the beauty, the enticement! The flowers of damnation
Called like sirens to all who hunger without common sense
Partake of this maniacal fruit of seduction and in regret
You shall meet a certain death of agony and lust.

Poetry by Kathy Lockhart The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2006-09-02 at 08:27

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indeed, the forbidden fruit... what makes it so is that we know better... and take the poison purposefully... an awesome collaboration here!

Phyllis J. Rhodes
"so attractive it looked that it meant no harm" ... . "But, it held its self with wicked greed, sending its poison out through bark, soil, leaves, fruit and seed"
That is true wickedness; evil through and through. A real operator, the Prince of Darkness, disguising his ugliness with an enchanting facade. This is a great collaboration.

Amanda K
Got it now. As humans we are attracted to beautiful stuff even though they may sometimes be harmful and do us no good.A work that joined wisdom and narrated by young thougts

Amanda K
I love team work. The poem was ok but i guess i need to read it again, to meditate and get the fruit.

lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
hi there Kathy this is a wonderful cowrite with Kid and your mutual skills show through rgds mike

A beautiful mythological narration!

It seems after all of our cautions, we are still Adam, Eve, Cain and Abel. Nice duet!!!