Melting Point ()


The shadows
one by one
It's melting point

Once,
the strongest soul
now with freezing breath

You were
before the atoms
the explict neutrons

The stream of my
mind waves

The desire
The pleasure

Of a night
without my self


/Dilsewat




Poetry by Dilsewat
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Written on 2005-09-12 at 10:00

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F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
it is strong what emotions for someone else can do to us at times... and your text makes me think of that... especially with the part "The desire, the pleasure Of a night without my self", spells abandon for me... a sweet escape... a love so soothingly intense it erases everything else that gets in the way - our mind... although im thinking this love is lost because of your use of the past tense... very beautiful expression... does have a dream quality to it... thanks for sharing :f

later... xx
2005-09-12



Shadows, melting point... Yes, this text is really you!
2005-09-12


chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
i think of dreaming here, leaving the body whilst asleep to go travelling other places, especially with the ending.
2005-09-12