Rain of fire - the wind is blowing - Tidal force

 

 

~¤~  Rise and Fall like the Tide ~¤~

Standing alone

insentient

 

the rain of fire

 Keeps falling

 

A heart beat

 

Behind the cloud of knowledge

the sun turns red

 

Falling from the ledge

the wind is blowing

 

water whirls around the body

whirl of nothingness

 

Bestow rain

disasterous fire

 

Death

 

the gift of nature

Evolution. . .

 

The circle of life

elliptical

 

The wind is blowing

rising tide

Whirl of life

a falling leaf

 

Water falling over rocky ledge

 

a bird twirls

 

A heart beat

~¤~ Drift or Ride with the Tide ~¤~





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Written on 2007-02-10 at 00:10

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Zoya Zaidi
Dear Carmen, this is absolutely beautiful, and the swirl made of words is fantastic! Only, the scattered nature of the text is distracting, and takes my mind away from the meaning of the words, I am kind of enwrapped in the twirl... I would suggest arranging the text in the normal classical manner, for better effect, because the words themselves are strong enough to create impact!
Just a suggestion dear, of course the poem is yours and ultimately it is your choice how you want to present it.
(((Hugs for the lonely piece, thought-provoking and inspiring))))
Love, Zoya
*Bookmarked*
2007-02-11


Phyllis J. Rhodes
I fell into a spell as I read your tale
bravo
2007-02-10


Bob
Yes! Defintly!
2007-02-10


Freeman
Wow, this was really something out of the ordinary!
It blew me away in so many ways, you are an incredible writer and poet!!! --<-<<@

You inspire me, thank you for so many reasons!!!
2007-02-10


Bob
PS.
I do like the graphic look of it.
2007-02-10


Bob
Interesting and it gives me many pictures, but I miss something in it, what I don't know. Perhaps it is too descriptive, too ephemeral, too far away from the ordinary, for me at least (who, by the way only writes out of the ordinary :-)
2007-02-10


Dan Cederholm
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Woderful writing and wonderful

graphic design here . . .

This could you use as Estrad poem!

I just love it, it takes the breath

out of me my friend!!

Hugs and all the best, Dan

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2007-02-10