Lost


the great belief
in neverending love
was always in the center
of my life

when you decided to leave
you took that faith
away from me

now I'm standing here
lost and confused

watching my hands
filled with a life
without any meaning
left at all







Poetry by Papaver
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Written on 2005-06-27 at 21:36

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F.i.in.e Moods The PoetBay support member heart!
I've read your poem late last night and thought I'd come by the next day to comment... here I am :) I see you've made spelling corrections and I agree that your poem reads a whole lot nicer now :) the feelings are very deep in your expression... it recreated exactly the painful realization of loss and the disillusionment it is to try to absorb it all... good poem... thanks for sharing :)

later...xx
2005-06-28


chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
it reads a whole lot better, great piece.
2005-06-28


Papaver
Thank You for Your corrections! Now I've checked it up and changed the words again. What do You think of that?
2005-06-28


chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
sorry - for making more work with editing for you, belive - believe :D i mistyped it.
2005-06-28


chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
a good piece - hard to get passed the spelling of belive but other than that, good.
2005-06-27