Blilith
No, do not go there, I know,
more than you can ever imagine
Grasp life
Take it

I thought Death was the answer
maybe
but
not
now

I see deep sorrow,

Love and blessings,
Blilith
2012-01-19

Spargo Postle
I'm not a critic so this is not really a critique, but here are my thoughts on this one... as a four line poem this is a well constructed piece... I like the term yesterday night on the second line but it becomes a bit of a stumbler when I read it out loud... You have a very clear and simple voice in this very deep and meaningful piece, but a poet doesn't have to die to become a great poet, a great poet must live through the tragedy and pain and use their talent to tell the world that they are there to share the good and the bad feelings that others can't express, this notion is now a burden you need to carry one with... Help us understand more about these feelings... Share with us your thoughts and words... Show those that are blind to such feelings... On a very pesonal note this one left me wanting more!!! Can you stretch this out but without it losing its power...??? Love Ya, Spargo Postle...
2011-09-13

'Yesterday night' should be last night.
Small 'i' should be capital.
Otherwise your poetry is okay and keep writing.
Why not post your poetry in the pool if you want
constructive criticism.
2009-11-22

Baskenmütze
this is so sad..please don't die.
things can get better
I know they can.
(On a side note: you have a knack for putting raw emotion on a page. bravo)
hang in there
2009-11-07