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"Carolina's Dress..."

Inspired by..."Carolina's Dress. Anne-Laure. Swansea, March 00" by Lucia Arjona Amo (http://www.picassomio.com/lucia-arjona-amo/5322.html)


the screen door slams as the man she loves fled out the back.
she doesn't shower, she wreaks

of musk and sex and doesn't care.
she lights a cigarette as she hears her husband in the driveway.

he's the kind with the corporate haircut, briefcase,
he's simple, yes or no, black or white.

he hates cigarette smoke but not enough to fight over it today.
he asks her where she wants to eat tonight, coughing,

breaking the sentence into phrases.
she's sitting there like she wants, smoking with no restraint,

starring past her husband's shoulder at the book shelves,
patient with her thoughts. never has he seen her so empty,

and for a second, he feels slightly uneasy and takes a couple steps back.
she is the type of woman that puts a man out like a cigarette,

the orange light melts into black, smoldering
where the fire used to breathe.

she averts her eyes and tells him everything,
even the parts shame usually silences and guilt thrives.

her eyes, dilated balloons, words tucking themselves into him
like hooks, roll off her tongue like slow honey.

in the end, he probably sits for moments in silence
after she quits speaking, engulfed in his own disdain

because he will probably never free her to dangle on her own independence,
he reasons, or another's upper hand

that knows the kind of woman she is. the kind that stays
no matter where she's put because she loves men like this.






Poetry by Christin Brennan
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Written on 2010-04-16 at 23:16

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nice reading
2010-04-17


Eli The PoetBay support member heart!
You're a good writer, and I like how the originality of your style still leaves the reader with lucid imagery.

If I can share a couple of points; "like slow honey" could become "slow-honey like", although it works okay as it is too. And should it be "staring" at the beginning of line eleven?

Thanks for sharing your work, it's nice to see you around here.
2010-04-17