This was retitled and was formerly called "Breaking".The next to last line was also changed from breaking to shattering.




Shattered

in the spirit of love

i waded in the pools

both shallow and deep

i floated on the seas

where lustful transgressions drown

i have walked on the shores

inside all the love poems

where only fantasies

can entwine

the monograms

carved on a tree

for forbidden lovers

hidden in reality

i have languished from the secrets

poured into lakes of silence

where the whispers freeze

into smooth gray slate

turning my spirit

into pellets of sleet

that ripples the glass

shattering

the serenity





 





Poetry by melanie sue
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Written on 2011-07-08 at 18:12

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Stan Cooper The PoetBay support member heart!
Melanie...this one is a goodie....your use of metaphors is
astounding...really enjoyed reading it....
Now I suggest you dive back into your pool and come up
with some more love

xxx Stan
2011-07-21


John Ashleigh
A compelling write - the structure is clever, and makes the poem all that more powerful. A pleasure to read. Thankyou for sharing.

Regards,
John.
2011-07-08