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For So Long

I waited for so long.
Full of hope I stood freezing,
wishing and waiting until
the sun set beneath the ocean's breath.
My heart sank
like a stone in my chest.

The night poured into me,
turning into velvet concrete in my veins.
I felt the moon rise,
I could hear the ripples on the water
laughing out loud - mocking me.
I suddenly knew, I had waited too long.

Poetry by Nathalia
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Written on 2018-07-10 at 00:18

Tags Loss  Love  Regret 

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Alan J Ripley The PoetBay support member heart!
I totally agree with the poeteers that have written before.
A joy to read. Regards Alan

"velvet concrete" is such a fresh and powerful image!


Rob Graber
This really expresses how devastating disappointment can be--how it feels: a "stone in my chest," "velvet concrete in my veins." Great job!

jim The PoetBay support member heart!
I may have said this before, but you have way of expressing yourself simply and profoundly. I am taken from my world to yours.

This is a beautiful, touching, heartfelt poem.

one trick pony The PoetBay support member heart!
the poignancy of this almost breaks my heart. beautifully written, nathalia

Jamsbo Rockda The PoetBay support member heart!
This is so good. And I think I know the feeling and you present it very well.