Beautiful. I love how the rhyme shifts slightly like it is on a breeze, or like modulating keys. LOVE it. Enjoy the blue eyes.
Very very lovely
And it's alkaline because litmus turns it blue
Great comeback much enjoyed and I hope you are not suffering with the blues. Doesn't red litmus paper turn blue with alkaline solutions? I could add music your list.
night soul woman
Hm wait a sec... hihi
Ok now, check this out :D!
Beck and call
inside her eyes
& every-time she cries:
Hey baby, I hear the blues a-callin'
This is great, Rob. You've definiitely gotten the blues.
one trick pony
i quite like this, though even with the help of wikipedia i cannot find a connection between alkaline and blue. i expect there is one, and i'll probably think of it just after i hit the "send comment" button.
i agree with elle, this has a touching sentimentality. très romantic, and the opening and closing lines (words) complement each other cleverly.
i would only add: vida
You old softie, I enjoyed this, good to see you Rob
Lovely! Very nicely put together. It's good to see you here.