| closed mind
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2005-09-06
this one tangles and twists in many directions...keep wandering, you'll eventually find another fork in the road upon which to contemplate..
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| four fingers
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2005-08-27
hmm, there is something about this piece that makes it compelling...but I can't say what...it reads disjointed that it's hard to make sense of, and yet, it seems to work somehow...i'll have to come back to this one..keep writing.
Always,
Amberlee
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| Today
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2005-07-14
at first this poem struggles for voice...but by the end you were on a steady course of direction..
The last 2 lines were the best of the poem I thought...original and honest..well done
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| in response to a writer.
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2005-07-11
"a broken heart
too big to fit between the lines "
I feel ya there...in fact, I think I've said that a million times before, but only not exactly...you have my attention, for sure..your work demands it..don't stop writing ok? I'm amazed when I think of where you'll be 6 months to years from now...probably pretty famous indeed...well done
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| .not avaliable.
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2005-07-10
wow...I honestly don't know what it is about this poem, but it spoke to me...I'm going to read it a few more times..I love the way your mind works.
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| Junglehearts
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2005-07-10
"For the love of bones and meat, for that ancient jungle beat
For peace"
I thought that was a very interesting statement...verall the poem was really creative...thanks
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| The beauty of roses...
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2005-07-10
awwww...
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| This is the age
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2005-07-09
this poetry speaks...
ithe only original thought process there is these days is when a writer can compose a poem with its own pulse...this has a heartbeat for sure....excellent work!
Always,
Amberlee
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| InJestion
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2005-07-09
" "Old habits don't die, they fester" "
that's a brilliant line there...excellent poem overall...inspiring and moving..
Always,
Amberlee
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from Syria 