just a quick ABAB, hopefully this is enough rhyming, Sameen. It can be read AABB as well and still retain meaning.




petering out

 

"petering out"



One stares across the fading yard,
Where autumn gnaws the rusting gate.
The days once raced now stumble hard,
And every hour arrives too late.

The mirror keeps a thinner ghost,
Its silver tongue devoid of grace.
It knows the things one fears to host,
Yet says them with a stranger’s face.

Still somewhere in the evening rain,
A stubborn ember yearns to glow.
Though engines cough and groan with pain,
Some roads refuse to let us go.






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Poetry by arquious The PoetBay support member heart!
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Written on 2026-05-27 at 01:31

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Sameen The PoetBay support member heart!
This is fucking amazing! The rhyme is awesome, of course, but the meter, the rhythm, is stellar! I love love love it!

One thing I'd like to point out is that while you used rhyme and meter, your voice still remains and that's what I was getting at! Play with structure but make it your own and you've done exactly that.

Kudos!
2026-05-27