Mankind, naked in this poem, maybe we should start thinking of what we are doing to thid earth... We are humans, not Gods.


Tonight we will sing

Tonight we will sing


Their feets are dancing
Bonfires plays with the darkness
The children are laughing
And the beasts in the shadows watching



Tonight we will raise our hands


Stretching for the stars
Reach for our fathers in heaven
Silent the beasts are dying
And our dearest mother herself is crying



Tonight we will cry


Tears, not for eachother
But for ourself, mankind
As our mother
And the beats saw while we where dancing


Selfish and blinded
Deaf
and soon
... dead



Poetry by Tina
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Written on 2006-11-20 at 10:04

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anoop.m.r
Beautiful and thoughtful.

regards,
anoop.m.r
2009-06-26


Amanda K
loved the contradiction and conflict of feelings and images; cryying, dancing, dying, living and dark...well-penned.
2007-01-07


night soul woman The PoetBay support member heart!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts! I can see that you have the potential to be a write and as I read in your presentation you appreciate constructive comments :) so here it comes

"Bonfires plays with the dark" can it be that you wanted to write bonfires plays with the darkness?
"The children is laughing" do you mean the child is laughing or the children are laughing?
and you forgot a letter when you typed :"Selfish and blinde"
selfish and blinded.

Take care and keep writing I will be reading!
2006-12-01