betsy Firefly
Sometimes, being away from our soul's dearest friend allows us no light, no door. We must learn to wait patiently.
2007-04-07

F.i.in.e Moods
missing someone so terribly can definitely make our world feel that way eh... descriptive imagery here again... well done *hugs* xx
2007-04-05

angelwings
The Keys within....reflective
2007-04-04

Hagzissa
Yes... the loneliness in the dark can eat you up inside, that's for sure.
Excellent writing here!
2007-04-04

Rob Graber
Hi, Salem! Good write here. The first three lines are fine; the last three might better be:


just darkness shares my loneliness

i am in a prison

i wish it had a door.


It's possible you want the last line in the past tense ("wished"), but I doubt it!
2007-04-04

Amanda K
feelings of longiness.well-done
2007-04-04

Zoya Zaidi
Yes dear Salem, there is no place worse thana prison n this world, be it mental, physical, psycholoical or metaphorical prison odf the soul!
((Hugs for the heart-felt poem!
Love, Zoya
2007-04-04

life without the loved one by your side is indeed a prison, with neither doors, nor windows, and the only light in such a prison is the hope that one day the one we love shall break through the darkness and warm up our soul...
a lovely poem here, Salem, a pleasure to read your words:)
Lilly xxx
2007-04-04

nature
beautifull as always Salem
you write with such depth
2007-04-04