Phyllis J. Rhodes
Wow! How exciting! How colorful! How fun!!How unexpected. Did your brain have the hiccups? This could be a rap. I started rocking back and forth as I read with a rhythm. Reminds me that someone left the cake out in the rain and I don't think that I can take it cause it took so long to make it and I'll never have that recipe again..............oh noooo.. Or, better yet it reminds me that:
five, ten, fifteen twenty, twenty-five, thirty, thirty-five, forty,
I went down the road, the road was muddy,
I stomped my toe and my toe was bloody
remember that one?
2007-09-11

Fabulous work on the dichotomy of human life, lets stay on the bright side if we can, is my motto. There but for the love of someone, goes, Tai, smiling at your wonderful talent x
2007-09-10

weirdzarun
My God darling, you never fail to impress. Wow. The image I got from this was: I am a homeless man who just based and am now listening to a Bob Dylan track in the streets of Brooklyn, freaking out and falling asleep on the sidewalk.

Have I dont it? No.

Do I want to do it? Now I do.
2007-09-10

lastromantichero
katherine drling this is a very clever and indeed an awesome poem and shows your command of the medium of poetry you words are as powerful as any i have read and this poem demonstrates again your exceptional skill as a writer xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxylk Michael
2007-09-10

F.i.in.e Moods
love the short lines' effect in this, like hopping along the thoughts as they come... dichotomy very well expressed... life, people, society, ideals, opinions, thoughts, morals etc etc all come with contradictions that are difficult to add up when they're all put together as a whole to see the picture... well, that's what comes to my mind when i read :) wish i could have "one of those times" of yours, excellent for sure... thanks :f *hugs* xx
2007-09-10

Joe Fern
Absolutely exellent. nothing like the sights and sounds of life passing by...
2007-09-10

J. E.
I really like this text, it got my image processor going. Well done!
2007-09-10