Round and Round



the mighty feather fucks around with the wind!
no one can actually convince the feather that it is the other way around

it was a Friday, I said it loud so that I could remember the exact day like right now when I think of it or tomorrow when I think of it again or a year from now when I'll still think of it. That was the day when I forgot looking forward behind the veil of smoked ham and cheese behind the wall of morning toast behind the ocean of coffee and the curtain of cigarette smoke. I never read the newspaper, I never bought the newspaper except when I was travelling by train. I liked reading the sports pages when I was travelling by train. I travelled by train 4 or 5 times a year, most of the time I was not travelling anywhere, I mostly went to the mall and bought food and soap and shampoo, sometimes a chocolate but not too often, and some fancy but cheap shirt made in Bangladesh or Pakistan. I hated buying shoes and bestsellers, who the fuck cares about the life of professor Robert Langdon? Anyway, it was a Friday, a beautiful day I slept through Saturday and on Sunday I went fishing, I had the feather in my pocket and I was squashing it with my hand.





Short story by Sanchez
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Written on 2009-09-04 at 16:20

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Christin Brennan
hey Sanchez!
i have you down as one of my writing buddies :), so i thought i'd check out your lastest text.
-i could make this a massive comment, but i'll try to simply put why i've chosen a few things to address...are you the wind that crushes the feather because he thinks he can fuck around w/ you (you being the wind)?? is Friday the day when roles reversed, & you took back your throne from the feather & then killed it? if not, then what the hell happened on friday? if there is something i'm not seeing, then explain because only a psychic could interpret what happened on dooms day Friday. 'That was the day when I forgot looking forward...,' because of what? how does this connect to the feather & wind?
-i'm going to stop here because i want to believe i'm just not seeing where you were going w/ this, but i would be lying if i didn't tell you in the back of my mind i don't think you really ever knew what you were writing about but thought it sounded cool. i understand what you have written, i just don't understand why you wrote it down in the first place. it's random

pls don't take this personally because all i am referring to is this particular 'poem,' not how you write or how well you write

cheers,
christin
2010-04-08



I was hooked on the first line!lol I do hear feathers are pretty productive in fishing circles!lol

Great write, dripping with irony

Tai, laughing her booty off!lol
2009-09-05


NicholasG
The opening statement is very seductive.
I enjoyed this.
Nick
2009-09-04