*reworking and revision of some older work I didn't like


Breaking

in the spirit of love

i waded in the pools

both shallow and deep

i floated on the seas

where lustful transgressions drown

i have walked on the shores

inside all the love poems

where only fantasies

can entwine

the monograms

carved on a tree

for forbidden lovers

hidden in reality

i have languished from the secrets

poured into lakes of silence

where the whispers freeze

into smooth gray slate

turning my spirit

into pellets of sleet

that ripples the glass

breaking

the serenity





Poetry by melanie sue
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Written on 2009-11-29 at 22:41

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Nils Teodor The PoetBay support member heart!
Very beautiful!
2009-11-30


Stan Cooper The PoetBay support member heart!
Melanie Sue...

Simply beautiful

thanks

xxx Stan
2009-11-30


Stan Cooper The PoetBay support member heart!
Melanie Sue...

Simply beautiful

thanks

xxx Stan
2009-11-30


shells
Continue your reworking, this is just lovely, I particularly liked the lines "poured into lakes of silence where the whispers freeze."
2009-11-30


janejeII
I will bookmark this beautiful poem

Blessed be
2009-11-29