Theme Up for a Ghazal?

The ghazal consists of couplets, built around a chosen refrain. Each instance of the refrain is preceded by the rhyme. So, if your line ends "with suspicious minds," you'll need to think of rhymes to put before that phrase:

We can't go on together with suspicious minds.
We'll brave the summer weather with suspicious minds.

After the first couplet, where both lines have the rhyme and the refrain, you employ the rhyme and refrain on the second line only. So:

We'll fly to Scotland, amble through the highlands,
Go traipsing through the heather with suspicious minds.

We'll be like goats at the end of our rope,
Straining at the tether with suspicious minds.

And so on. It is a custom of the ghazal to "sign your work" with your final couplet:

Folks look at wee Tommo. They greet his claim
That he's light as a feather with suspicious minds.

It's tricky, but perhaps an illustration will help!



Thomas D

51 years old from USA

Freestyle Ghazal

Let me blab and bluster, blurty in the morning.
I'll brew up the Folgers at 3.30 in the morning!

I'll jump in the shower, get dressed, spruce up,
Unless I want to be dirty in the morning!

I'll banter with neighbours over coffee and doughnuts;
The ladies will laugh! (Me, flirty in the morning?)

I shall contend with tendonopathy.
Plus a slight backache. Hurty in the morning.

I'll bang out a ghazal on the laptop keyboard:
I've got mad skills! QWERTY in the morning!

Perhaps I'll just repeat myself like old Miss Stein,
From here to infinity!  Gertie in the morning!

I shall impersonate a 19th-century poetess
Sipping (delicately) her tea in the morning.

It's chilly now, but the sun will make it warmer;
November foliage! Whee! Purty in the morning.

Tommo, wee lummox, you think you can freestyle?
Dude, you're way too starched-shirty in the morning!





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Kathy Lockhart The PoetBay support member heart!
Oh boy! This is truly a challenge!
The best part was reading your example poetry.
You had me laughing at nearly five thirty in the morning.
I really enjoyed this. Thanks, Thomas. :)
2020-08-10


bibek adhikari The PoetBay support member heart!
This made me smile. I read some couplets (sher) over and over. Thanks for writing and posting this!
2020-08-09

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