Sameen
This has a scrappy, admiring energy. The portrait of someone who runs on defiance, who needs a cause more than comfort, is vivid and a little romantic. The repetition of "just to prove somebody wrong" gives the poem a nice spine. But the language gets a bit tangled in places, especially the shift from "somebody" to "me" in the third stanza, which muddies who the speaker is in all this. The final stanza is the strongest, where love and stubbornness finally meet. A little more clarity about the relationship would make that ending hit even harder. Still, the affection feels earned.
2026-08-25

Melinda K Zarate
Stubbornness or persistence? The difference is in the why. You mention the heart which, to me, indicates persistence, believing in a cause. But if the cause is to prove someone wrong, then that would be stubbornness, wouldn’t it? Your poem really made me stop and think. Well done.

Melinda
2026-08-10

arquious
Artorius, there’s real heart in this piece,
that steady drive you capture feels honest
and close to lived experience.
You’ve shaped something that stands firm in its simplicity,
and that’s a true strength.
Keep going with this voice; it has clarity and purpose.

Language: 3
Format: 3
Mood: 4
Overall: 3
2026-08-10

Jamsbo Rockda
I like it. You kept the main theme throughout and the rhymes are good.
2026-08-10