for you dear, eternity

holding hands, lying down
glowing eyes, dancing clown
scary dreams, torture life
I will never end the fight

stabbing hearts, hidden blade
falling night, corpses made
justice dies, seed of hate
coming day, we all await

strangled scream, rising hand
ocean boil, swallow sand
hope prevents, nothing now
run my dear, i will bow

calling you, from the deep
here i am, never sleep
sacrifised, given me
for you dear, eternity




Poetry by Cr4Ky
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Written on 2006-07-28 at 18:59

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Emelén The PoetBay support member heart!
I see vivid images of a future near in this poem.
It makes love to my sci-fi mind and as I live better in darkness how can I not but feel at home in these scenes.
A few suggestions regarding the poem though ;the line: "scary dreams, torture life",, is the comma not misplaced ? and line: "sacrifised, given me
for you dear, eternity" , it might be better for rythm with a -my dear- and sacrificed needs a spelling correction, but these are just suggestions. Loved this write.
2006-07-29