Have you ever awaken in the middle of the night...


In the middle of the night
I woke up in a sweat,
I peeped through the window
a secret I kept...

Drops of H2O
combined with NaCl,
I tried to close my eyes
but to no avail...

Curved lines and some straight
maps of age...
I looked through the window,
A smile I engaged...

Sweet thoughts of tomorrow
Sorrow times of yesterday,
I saw through the window
His image I pray...

We were created from His image
In the Scriptures it is written,
I saw through the window
His Grace never forbidden...

Finally, asleep I fell
with a secret to tell,
for when the morning came
I laughed by my bed...
for what I was seeing through,
was not a window,
but a mirror instead!

@ Ray Aguilar 2005

Poetry by Ray
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Written on 2005-10-09 at 23:40

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Zoya Zaidi
This is a beautiful poem.I know what it is like to to wake up in the middle of the night,it can be scary,especially if you are far away from home on, the sea say... NaCl (Sodium Chloride) is the common salt ,Chasingthegate. Excellant!!!

chasingtheday The PoetBay support member heart!
it might help educating us who do not know what NaCI is in the notes, not all of us took chemistry or were any good at it lol again with the elipses here, the first verse simply doesn't need them, a full stop would be much better. same in the other times you have used them.

they are used in proper context to show a continuation of a thought, ok maybe in the first one used but definately not in the other places.

maps of age... - maps of age? what is the suggestion of thought here? it is unclear, a full stop would be better. and i know you think im etc what you said to me but this in my eyes is constructive crit. trying to show you you are using things wrong.

i know not everyone cares, but it bugs me seeing so many use these as if it is a cool thing - a fad if you like. it just puts me off reading!

sorry lol as i have said to you, i am not being overly critical to appear mean to anyone, it is just my way. please do not take offense.

Very good--I like the way the poem flows.

Commentally Ill
to look in the mirror, is to see his reflection, if we were truly made in his image? so my question is then, is god a psychopath too?? kiddin, ha.