TAINTED TOWN


Shame and guilt all around.
Blood-stained wall - a tainted town.
Human relations always betrayed.
Human debts are never repaid.

Should we forgive the devil's deeds?
Should we have mercy upon his pleads?
Or should we give him a taste of his own?
Get right down to it and cut through his bone?

Each and every day we shed some blood.
The tear becomes a river becomes a flood.
The only thing we stress is the constant strife.
We never will learn the value of life.

Mournful eyes are hiding their pain.
They're looking away, try to keep sane.
Guilt drops a tear to get rid of it's fear.
But nothing can clear what's going on here.

This is a view that we never see.
We close our eyes, can't afford the fee.
Blood-stained walls all around.
Welcome to this tainted town.








Poetry by Daybreaker
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Written on 2006-12-02 at 01:03

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liz munro The PoetBay support member heart!
you express yourself so well in this.

it's sad how man is so distrucive.

BOOKMARKED.

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2007-01-03


Amanda K
This is indeed a masterpiece. As a structure, theme, & mood. It's really strong and calls for attention from the world.Blood-shedded,casualities,bodies and so on. Scenes we watch on daily basis but who will take the initiative to change the world, God knows. THank you, i I sincerely enjoyed reading it.

Kind Regards,

Amanda

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2006-12-13



You express the horror of man's warring on the rest of the world so well in this beautifully flowing piece of your heart. The blood stains us all. This sort of poem brings it out for the public to face or as you so aptly point out in the poem, to turn away. I am desperately hoping the lessons of the past 5 years will finally be held tight in our conscious minds and never rear it's ugly head again. Great work. Smiling at you, Tai

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2006-12-10


TheLine
The rhythm and the rhymes are flawless. Great poem. It really captures some dark moods of the human psyche.
2006-12-06


Антони
I agree, it reminds me of the US too.
overall, a very achingly real poem,
and a good one at that.
thought the first two lines in the last
stanza were incredible.

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2006-12-05


lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
this is a rythmic and an awesome text this is cool and this is a text that reminds me of
a poem by Rudyard Kipling called 'Tomlinson' well done rgds mike

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2006-12-04



WOW! this is an amazing poem, for somereason it reminds me of the US. (oh no, the CIA will kill me). This is great, i love the reality and symbolism of it. This is very well written, i love it.

~Kiva
2006-12-02