Dedicated to Tsutomu Yamaguchi.


Nijuuhibaku Haiku

See the distant flash

Rolling through our once green ash

Feel the setting sun



Haiku by weirdzarun
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Written on 2009-04-17 at 22:02

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Rob Graber
So important not to forget... Good job!


I'm thinking "ash" is what the bomb LEFT, not what was there before ("once-green"). An alternative line 2 would be "Finding green and leaving ash." A drawback is that the powerful image of 'rolling' is lost... Just a thought.

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2009-04-17