Gosh! This is really catching...as Marei would put it: The "Sometimes I feel..." revolution! I am enjoying it thoroughly! This is in answer to Kip's honeybee...


Sometime I feel I am the Candle off your Honeycomb...(answer to kip's honeybee)...

Sometimes I feel I am the candle* off your honeycomb,
Of wax, you lovingly made, the essence of your home,
The wax that came pouring out of your belly, dear bee,
With which you built so arduously, the vessels of honey,
That sweet honey you poured into every pore of me!
Secure was I under your care, your sweetest melody
Came as music to my ears, your soft hum next to me!

They 'smoked' you out & emptied me off all sweet honey,
Melted and structured me to the slender stick, that's me!

Now I burn and melt alone, with you nowhere near me,
Moth a thousand circle around, while I yearn for thee!
Their buzz creates around my ears such a cacophony,
Jarring to the gentle heart and soul you gave to me!

I melt & melt, and light the world-that is my destiny!
I melt & melt, and get consumed in anguished agony,
The lusty eyes of moths around, spell my doom to me...


Author: Zoya Zaidi
Aligarh (UP), India,
Copyright: Zoya Zaidi



*Now Kip, may be you would be the moth...?
Or if for that matter, any one who wants to take it up from here?




Poetry by Zoya Zaidi
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Written on 2006-02-02 at 13:13

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Teala
Wow---nice!!
2006-02-22


Veld Cooper
The series continues......clever, thought-provoking and most enjoyable, indeed!
2006-02-04


Celtic boy
another excellent write in the "series" :)
2006-02-03


in'kwa
I absolutely love this one! Though a bit sombre in the end..will be hard to bring back life into this one but what the heck, might just give it a shot..might! After the bee i wondered what you would become.Kudos!
2006-02-02


kip
...gees Zoya, this is really catchy, there's a rhythm to it that simply dumbfounding...i'll let somone else do the moth..

coming soon...
...'Sometimes i feel i am the wick engulfed in your wax,
My slender self lost in the massive embrace that is you, my candle...

...We are still on...
2006-02-02


lastromantichero The PoetBay support member heart!
hi zoya it is really catching this but well done and such good images rgds mike
2006-02-02