If anyone is able to connect the rhyme between line 1 and 3 I would be very grateful. I just could not find anything that rhymed on silver and I think silver is a keyword in line 1.


Moon

Struck by tears of silver
Luck beneath her feet
Her gaze makes me shiver
A blaze covered in sheet

Death by young Horus
Seth set his cruel hand
Reborn, sung in chorus
Scorn from land to land



Poetry by Crake
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Written on 2009-08-01 at 19:09

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Achernar
Extremely difficult to rhyme words at the beginning and at the end of the line!! I would not even attempt it. You have done a very fine and most excellent job here!!

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2009-08-05